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'Made a minor edit in lines 9-10 to rescue the rhyme. I hope it didn't do any damage. WhoeverBecause sweet reason always seemed to mea greater source of solace than was God,Ive found belief in what I...
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No technical comments (I ain't there yet) but I just wanted to say I love this one - as a spiritual waffler myself I can thoroughly identify with this.
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The perfect moment for proselyters to ring the doorbell and start a lifesaving conversation. "Sic vive tamquam cras moriturus, sic stude quasi semper victurus."~ Desiderius Erasmus of Rotterdam...
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This sonnet is lush with what makes a sonnet such a pleasure to enjoy. The meter flows smooth like water, the sentences are connected syntactically leaving no need to mount dubious interpretation...
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Your sonnet is beautiful and reminds me of the novel "Cold Mountain"by Charles Frazier:Ada left the porch and walked down past the barn into the pasture. The sun was long gone below the ridgelines,...
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Grady, I'm speechless with admiration for the moment you describe and the sense of awe such flashes of instinctive response occasion in us. And I admire the sonnet too.Who was it said: "If only you...
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This works just fine, of course. Double-modifiers are a bete-noir of mine, so L-6 and 8 gave me problems...but that's just me (and I've done it myself).I wanted L-8 to go "in brilliant fire and holds,...
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Lovely sonnet, Grady.I didn't expect a rhyming couplet. Your form implies a rhyme between L11 and 14.Anyway, compliments.Regards,David
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Good comments, McArthur--The double modifiers are a bit much, I agree -- but it was a spectacular sight. And THREE "holds" would have been a little self-contradictory, given that I immediately follow...
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DG: I completely missed the failure to rhyme the two lines you noted. I've been trying to revise it for the last hour without notable success. Darn! (I wish you'd completely missed it, too. It turns...
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This is a splendid sonnet Grady. Congratulations.You must have dealt with whatever it was that David mentioned and you grizzled about.I have had moments like that, breath-catching events that in...
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JUDE: You know how to tender a compliment in the most graceful of ways. Thanks.
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